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  1. Call me Ems

     /  November 30, 2012

    Ohmygosh! Ri how do you do it? That’s so awesome. You have true talent.

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    • Ri

       /  December 1, 2012

      with great encouragement from readers like you! thank you!

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      • Call me Ems

         /  December 3, 2012

        How long have you been writing? That work is as good as any professional author’s and better than many! I could go on all day telling you how awesome it was and why and still not describe exactly how good it was. But you probably don’t want me to, so I’ll quit.

      • Ri

         /  December 3, 2012

        Oh ho ho you flatter me. I’m like 1000 years old give or take 981 years and I’ve been writing for 10 of those, since like third grade. Although I didn’t have a good story until 5th…but even that story wasn’t anything worth reading for a long long time. I kept scratching it and restarting and finally I finished it in 10th grade but I thought, hey this is so important to me, I don’t want people to share it until it’s perfect. Just the other day, I was in class and rewrote the backstory for a bunch of characters. I don’t remember what my point was…write often? I’ve been trying for a while and I’ve still got a lot to go, basically. But thank you for the kind words :)

      • Ri

         /  December 3, 2012

        Also, I’m curious– what part did you like best?

  2. Call me Ems

     /  December 4, 2012

    So the oldest you are is 1981 years old and the youngest you are is…um…around 19? Haha. So, what I liked best? Man, that’s hard, but I think I liked the end best. It was very dramatic, the:
    ‘Her hand finds mine.
    I hold it tight.
    I close my eyes.
    I breathe.’
    Really nice. But I also liked the beginning. Maybe I’m dumb, but I couldn’t really tell if it was dream or reality or some weird limbo in between….okay. It wasn’t the last one. But still.
    Please post more of your stories soon. They’re so good! Have you gotten over the 1st sentence in your long story yet?
    Oh, and by the way, the pretty snowy dotty things in the background are a nice touch.

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    • Call me Ems

       /  December 6, 2012

      Now I’m just sounding weird. I mean, of course, the dotty things in the background of your website, not the story. And they are a nice touch. Am I even making sense anymore? No, I’m not. Shut up, me.

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    • Ri

       /  December 6, 2012

      Yeah I definitely don’t explain things as well as I could in my writing, but mostly because I like it when I can develop my own ideas about the details in the books I read. Also, I don’t like reading tons of description or tacky back stories. Also, mystery? So it’s always interesting to hear what people think of a piece of writing like, maybe this was a dream, maybe it was something else. I mean, I can and will provide definite answers because this story actually lies in the history of my entire writing world (all my stories take place in the same universe), but like, I think it’s fun to be able to decide for yourself too.

      I haven’t gotten the 1st sentence yet…finals week :( But I do have another story lined up for tomorrow. And…credit wordpress for the snow in the background. They do it for the holidays. It’s cute :)

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      • Call me Ems

         /  December 6, 2012

        No, I actually don’t mind that I can’t tell what stuff is, like at the beginning. It gives you the choice to kind of decide for yourself what it was, and I enjoy that freedom rather than the author telling you exactly what was happening and why and what everyone was feeling. Also, the fact I know no names in the story makes it more interesting and lets me name her myself. (In case you’re interested, in my head I call the girl/woman/protagonist Shadow. Which I know you were dying to know.)

        However, I do have a couple of questions for you. I get that the population of the Earth moved underground, and I get that it was because of the bomb things, but then how did Shadow know it was safe to escape? Or now that I think about it, maybe she didn’t and was testing her luck. Hmm. Alright, and the second question is, if the world outside was so toxic, why did the People leave a big air vent ‘fatter than all the fat people strung together’?

        Now you’ve made my day! Another story for tomorrow? Yesss! I can’t wait. That first sentence is really bothering you, huh Ri?

        I’ve just made a very important discovery. The snow follows my mouse on the page! It goes in the same direction. And holidays! That’s the magic word at the moment. I have 1&1/2 weeks to wait until the Christmas holidays start. I can’t wait!

      • Ri

         /  December 6, 2012

        If you like deciding for yourself, you should see my story notes! They are literally a choose your own adventure. I’m always writing, “maybe this will happen, but they might do this instead” and I never know until I actually write the story. Like, I have no control over my characters.

        Interestingly, though I never explicitly state the gender of Shadow, it’s a he. There is a small hint- he sits with the men :)

        Those are some good questions. Let’s see what I can answer…so I think that the reason they went underground was in part due to nukes, but the part of the world that WAS nuked isn’t the part that they are hiding under. So, the accounts for them being able to have an air vent. They were as much hiding from radioactivity as they were the people that created it. Also, I guess Shadow didn’t know, but because he had nothing to loose, he could afford to try and he lucked out. I mean, it wasn’t like super toxic above to begin with, but some weird stuff was going on…that will be disclosed in later stories.

  3. Call me Ems

     /  December 7, 2012

    SERIOUSLY!!!! Shadow is a man!!! ohmygosh I have been imagining him/her as a girl all this time. This is really annoying. I have this perfect image of Shadow as a girl/woman in my head and then you tell she’s a he. My poor perfect image is currently lying shattered on the ground. And I’m sad. But that probably doesn’t matter. Except to me. I think the reason I thought Shdow was a girl was because he teamed up with that girl (Sandy, I call her.)

    Your story notes sound cool-where do I find them? I could have sworn that before this, I had been on every page in your website. If you are about to say that they can be found on your Stories And Projects page, I can never find it, because the link never seems to work for me, although that might be my computer. Or where I live.

    It seems like you have everything thought out in your story. I can’t find a weak spot. And your story actually makes sense. I mean, in The Hunger Games there are supposed to be natural disasters an North America, but isn’t it so lucky how those 14 cities/districts survived? It doesn’t really link. But your story does. Like, moving underground makes a lot more sense than 14 cities being spared from natural disasters, right? And also, it seems like your government is nice. I mean, they let you pursue knowledge and stuff, but all the other dystopias I’ve read all have totalitarian governments. I guess that makes sense, but…well, let’s just say that your nice government was a refreshing change.

    So there will be more stories about Shadow? I’m happy now! (yeah, I know I’m fickle). It would be cool to see what her-no, his life Outside is like. And if the People follow him up. And if Shadow and Sandy like…well…end up together. (Shut up. I can hear everyone laughing as they read this comment.) In your own words, sometimes you just can’t resist a good romance. But please make itt good if it is there at all. I HATE bad romances. Wow. I just sounded so fussy. I meant that with the least possible offense.

    PS-I’ve just signed up for the emails once you post a new entry. So now I’ll have you in my inbox every time! Hooray.

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  4. Call me Ems

     /  December 8, 2012

    Wow. Wow. Wow. Wow. Wow. That was amazing. I love your stories. The only gripe I have is the weird font style at the beginning. I mean, I don’t mind it, but it changed like halfway through the first page and then random phrases were in another font. But it didn’t detract from the quality of the story. That was Ah-MAY-ZING.

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